Gallery+of+Student+Work

Gallery of Student Work

Below are files that showcase student work. Click to see the variety of approaches to communicating effectively in ELA.

ORQ student samples of the best of 2012 and 2013

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First one highights vivid verbs in grenn, precise vocab in pink and transitions in pink. This one is concise, but details are introduced clearly. ======

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In second one, on internal conflict, precise vocabulary choices in yellow, vivid verbs in orange, and transitions to show relationship between ideas in blue. Writer sets up and paraphrases quotations so reader KNOWS the student understands the text AND what the text shows. Quotations are well chosen to make CLEAR points directly related to the topic. ALL parts of the question are answered--not only "What is an internal conflict in the story?" but also "HOW does th is conflict move the plot forward?" ======

Both earn a 4 out of 4 on the MCAS ORQ scale





2012 samples from MCAS packet questions 

Before and after MCAS long comp lead paragraphs. The first version is clear, uses effective vocabulary, and some figurative language. It is pretty good!



After Revison to add sensory description, this NEW lead pulls the reader in to a moment. It ZAPS! __Zooms__ in on a moment, has strong __ACTION__ VERBS; uses __PERSONIFICATION__; and appeals to the senses--especially __SOUND__. The reader connects with this and is hooked to read more. It gets the reader neatly from the moment to the main focus of the rest of the essay---which will be Mom. The writer can take her first lead and revise it for use as a second paragraph to introduce and transition to the body of the paper and the main points she will make to __prove__ Mom is a hero. 

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Student visual of how conflict works